I wouldn't say you need to improve. I thought you did a good job. It was a first time experience for us though, so I have nothing to compare it to. It would have been nice if all of the windows in the house were checked for a broken seal, as we had the homeowners replace the ones that were specifically mentioned, but there could be more that weren't mentioned based on the language in the write-up. However, I'm not sure this is a realistic practice, and I was happy to get what we got. We'll really find out how good of an inspection it was in a couple years of living in the home.
I loved how thoroughly Mark went over everything he saw and offered his best opinion of how to move forward with repairs, and when to seek other professional opinions. This was my first home inspection and it he made it seamless and very easy to understand.